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I've attached a patch that corrects one factual error and a number of
grammatical issues/typos in the CCD chapter of the guide.  I haven't
included a patch against chap-ccd.html as I couldn't work out where that
came from in time - pointers for that appreciated.

Cheers,

Ceri
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Only two things are infinite, the universe and human stupidity, and I'm
not sure about the former.			  -- Einstein (attrib.)

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RCS file: /a/NetBSD/ncvs/htdocs/guide/en/chap-ccd.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.11
diff -u -r1.11 chap-ccd.xml
--- htdocs/guide/en/chap-ccd.xml	13 Nov 2004 14:46:52 -0000	1.11
+++ htdocs/guide/en/chap-ccd.xml	11 Dec 2004 00:53:35 -0000
@@ -27,8 +27,8 @@
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   <para>The <acronym>CCD</acronym> driver allows the user to
     <quote>concatenate</quote> several physical disks into one pseudo
-    volume. While RAIDFrame (see <xref linkend=3D"chap-rf" />) allows
-    doing this too to create RAID level 0 sets, it does not allow you
+    volume. While RAIDFrame (see <xref linkend=3D"chap-rf" />) also allows
+    doing this to create RAID level 0 sets, it does not allow you
     to do striping across disks of different geometry, which is where
     CCD comes in handy.  CCD also allows for an
     <quote>interleave</quote> to improve disk performance with a
@@ -167,8 +167,8 @@
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     <para>You will probably want to remove any pre-existing disklabels
-      on the disks in the CCD.  This can be accomplished one of two ways
-      the &man.dd.1; command:</para>
+      on the disks in the CCD.  This can be accomplished in one of two ways
+      with the &man.dd.1; command:</para>
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     <screen>&rprompt; <userinput>dd if=3D/dev/zero of=3D/dev/rsd0c bs=3D8k=
 count=3D1</userinput>
 &rprompt; <userinput>dd if=3D/dev/zero of=3D/dev/rsd1c bs=3D8k count=3D1</=
userinput>
@@ -188,7 +188,7 @@
     <para>
       This will make all data on the entire disk unaccessible. Note
       that the entire disk is slice <filename>d</filename> on i386
-      (and some other ports), and <filename>d</filename> else (e.g. on
+      (and some other ports), and <filename>c</filename> elsewhere (e.g. on
       sparc). See the <quote>kern.rawpartition</quote> sysctl - "3"
       means "d", "2" means "c".
     </para>=20
@@ -255,7 +255,7 @@
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     <para>Be sure to write the label when you have completed.
       Disklabel will object to your disklabel and prompt you to
-      re-edit if it does not pass it's sanity checks.</para>
+      re-edit if it does not pass its sanity checks.</para>
   </sect1>
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@@ -263,7 +263,7 @@
   <sect1 id=3D"chap-ccd-configure">
     <title>Configure the CCD</title>
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-    <para>Once all disk are properly labeled, you will need to
+    <para>Once all disks are properly labeled, you will need to
       generate a configuration file,
       <filename>/etc/ccd.conf</filename>.  The file does not exist by
       default, and you will need to create a new one.  The format
@@ -284,9 +284,9 @@
 ccd0  0  none /dev/sd0c /dev/sd1c /dev/sd2c /dev/sd3c</screen>
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     <note>
-      <para>the CCD configuration file references the device file
+      <para>The CCD configuration file references the device file
 	for the newly created CCD filesystems.	Be sure not to
-	reference the block device at this point, instead use
+	reference the block device at this point; instead use
 	the character device.</para>
     </note>
   </sect1>
@@ -366,7 +366,7 @@
 #        size   offset    fstype   [fsize bsize   cpg]
   c: 12508812        0    4.2BSD     1024  8192    16  # (Cyl. 0 - 6107*)<=
/screen>
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-    <para>The filesystem will then need formatted:</para>
+    <para>The filesystem will then need to be formatted:</para>
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     <screen>&rprompt; <userinput>newfs /dev/rccd0c</userinput>
 Warning: 372 sector(s) in last cylinder unallocated
@@ -383,7 +383,7 @@
     <title>Mount the filesystem</title>
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     <para>Once you have a  created a file system on the CCD device,
-      you can can mount the file system against an mount point
+      you can then mount the file system against a mount point
       on your system. Be sure to mount the slice labeled type
       <literal>ffs</literal> or <literal>4.2BSD</literal>:</para>
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