Re: I-D ACTION:draft-ietf-secsh-publickey-subsystem-03.txt

[der Mouse <mouse%Rodents.Montreal.QC.CA@localhost>]

> 	Filename	: draft-ietf-secsh-publickey-subsystem-03.txt

This looks good.  I do see a few copy-edit details, whch I shall leave
it up to others to decide on the actual importance of:

Lines 242-244:
   The version packet, as well as all requests and responses described
   in Section 3 are a description of the 'name' field and the data part
   of the packet.
s/3/3,/

Line 304:
   SHOULD be sent.  Note that normally, status messages are only sent by
s/only sent by/sent by only/

Line 367:
   SSH_PUBLICKEY_ACCESS_DENIED
s/$/./

Lines 372-375:
   SSH_PUBLICKEY_ATTRIBUTE_NOT_SUPPORTED.  For the purposes of a
   mandatory attribute, storage of the attribute is not sufficient, but
   requires that the server understand and implement the intent of the
   attribute.
That "requires" looks subjectless; strictly, it appears to refer back
to "storage" eight words earlier, but that reads nonsensically.  While
I think the meaning is clear, I'm not confident non-anglophones will
find it as clear as I do; you might want to reword it.  Suggestion:
   SSH_PUBLICKEY_ATTRIBUTE_NOT_SUPPORTED.  For the purposes of a
   mandatory attribute, mere storage of the attribute is not
   sufficient; the server must understand and implement the intent of
   the attribute.

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